Carpe Diem Universal Jane #17 fragment and phrase

I wrote this poem and then edited trying to use the fragment phrase .  With each edit I was happy until I looked at it the next day.  Not quite happy yet, leaning toward the first now.  Anyway here are my attempts.  ( Here is one of the bluejay inspecting my strawberry patch.)


bluejays squabble
over scarlet berries
not one left unblemished


bluejays  squabble
not one left unblemished
scarlet berries


squabbling bluejays
my scarlet berries