Carpe Diem Tokubetsudesu #66 Teika’s Ten Tanka Techniques by Jane Reichhold
winter afternoon
fluttering on the lawn
a large butterfly
on closer inspection
only a leaf skeleton
in the garden
I search for signs of spring
daffodil leaves dawn
predictions of winter snow
overshadow my joy
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January 20, 2016 at 3:30 pm
How original the skeleton of a plant .. lovey tanka though, both of them.
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January 21, 2016 at 5:12 am
Thanks. The picture doesn’t quite show the delicacy of the leaf or all the lace like holes.
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January 21, 2016 at 7:51 am
True .. but its beauty was also transmitted through your poem.
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January 21, 2016 at 7:52 pm
Nature gives us so much to marvel at. This is so personal taking the reader out into the garden to partake of these moments.
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January 21, 2016 at 8:13 pm
Nature is all inspiring. Glad you enjoyed. I actually saw the leaf from my studio and could not believe a large moth or butterfly was out outside so I braved the cold to explore.
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January 22, 2016 at 1:09 am
It is still winter I have to keep reminding myself.
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January 22, 2016 at 1:30 am
Until this morning so did I. My husband just headed to Louisville to pick our daughter for her week off school. He was hoping to go up tomorrow since she works until 8, but more sleet and snow are to arrive around midnight. They should just beet it home.
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January 25, 2016 at 1:04 am
Your first Tanka brought a nice haiku in mind byMoritake:
A fallen blossom
returning to the bough, I thought —
But no, a butterfly.
© Arakida Moritake (1473-1549)
I like that riddle idea in this haiku, but I can find this also in your first tanka. Really well done Dolores.
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January 25, 2016 at 1:06 am
Funny hadn’t thought of that even though reading his poem in 4th grade made me want to be a poet.
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