Carpe Diem Little Creatures #19 violets
dandelions,violets
bouquet wilting in tiny hands
springs first precious gifts
This poem is an old one from 2001. Thought I tried to edit it to free style form but not very successful, or does it just become a different poem all together?
wilted bouquet
dandelions and violets
precious gift
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March 8, 2015 at 5:33 am
Hmmm…. while the second poem has a better “form” … follows the “rules” better .. it IS a totally different poem. Both are good – but there’s more joy in the first one. The second seems to have a tinge of sadness perhaps???
Either way, it makes a gorgeous haiga 🙂
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March 8, 2015 at 6:34 pm
Thanks Jen. I see your point exactly.
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March 8, 2015 at 7:21 am
I agree with Jen … the first is sprightly and happy .. I see the child with his/her springtime offering .. the second has a more melancholy feel about it .. and I love the beautiful bright haiga you created!
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March 8, 2015 at 6:45 pm
Thanks, The background is a watercolor I did a few years ago.
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March 11, 2015 at 11:51 pm
Wow! On that painting, so jealous!
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March 11, 2015 at 11:52 pm
Enjoyed the haiku too.
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March 9, 2015 at 12:13 am
Your watercolor is beautiful!!
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March 9, 2015 at 2:17 am
Thanks Judie
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