Heeding Haiku with HA: A Quiet Life   My tanka was inspired by the video at our host’s site.  I wrote one version in 5/7/5/7/7 and two shortened versions.  Let me know which you like?  Any critique welcome.

and rose petals
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5/7/5/7/7

fallen rose petals
tattered journal of my life
stained with blood and tears
cold and alone I cry out
so lost among the shadows

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shortened versions

petals fall
tattered journal
stained
alone I cry
lost in shadow

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fallen petals
tattered existence
tear stained
alone and cold
lost among shadows

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