Carpe Diem’s Writing Techniques # 4, Surprise
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in autumn sunlight
dancing across your gravestone
shadows and memories
~
in the street light
playing with a mouse
a screech owl
~
late at night
the click of Mahjong tiles
and a cat’s meow
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January 28, 2015 at 4:23 am
All of these are so well done — but for some reason I’m really partial to the Mah Jong tiles and the cat’s meow — quite a striking scene 🙂
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January 29, 2015 at 3:55 am
Thanks Jen!
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January 28, 2015 at 8:09 am
Wonderfuly atmospherc – all these ones are particularly good. Somewhat different than your style, but honestly all the better for it. Powerful.
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January 29, 2015 at 3:56 am
Thanks glad you liked these.
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January 28, 2015 at 9:15 am
I so like the intensity of the last one.. all are well done, but that one carries a special atmosphere I think
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February 2, 2015 at 5:16 pm
Thanks! I can just see the tiles cascading to the floor as the cat jumps from the table.
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January 28, 2015 at 6:44 pm
Dancing on a gravestone evokes images of triumph over the dead one…
Leaving Her Face Behind
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January 28, 2015 at 6:57 pm
in autumn sunlight
dancing across your gravestone
shadows and memories
This is really a nice haiku Dolores, I like that surprise hidden in this one.
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January 29, 2015 at 3:58 am
Glad you enjoyed, wasn’t sure of the surprise element was strong enough in this one.
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January 29, 2015 at 1:37 pm
Do owls play with their prey, or do they just rip the victim apart? I really don’t know…
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January 29, 2015 at 3:20 pm
I doubt that they do, but…..
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February 9, 2015 at 11:11 pm
I really like how you took the idea of dancing on someone’s grave – a phrase that’s hugely negative – and made it natural and even joyous.
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February 10, 2015 at 4:04 am
Thanks, I hoped it had that effect.
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